On Sunday, I and family went to Kaliurang Park with family car. I and family look for consolation. We left home at o8.00 o’clock.
I and family there to go buy tickets. After buying a ticket first thing we see is the statue green shorts. After that we were to Telogo Putri and where I ride an Jeep Wilise want to Kinahrejo.
We return home at 15.00 o’clock. And I ate with family in Sego Abang Lombok Ijo. And then I with family return home rest, we feel happy.
Name : Rizal Ardian Hanafi
Class/No : 8c/28
Name : Rizal Ardian Hanafi
Class/No : 8c/28
After buying a ticket first thing we see is the statue green shorts.
BalasHapuschange into :
After buying a ticket first thing we saw is the statue green shorts.
On Sunday, I and family went to Kaliurang Park with family car.
BalasHapuschanges into :
On Sunday, my family and I went to Kaliurang Park with our car (my family's car).
nice comment and your job to revise it now, please.
BalasHapusdon't forget to use verb two in your sentence.
thanks.