In 5 August 2011, i and my brother is watching Transformers 3 at a cinema at Jogjakarta.
When we arrived at the cinema, we immediately parking our motorcycle. When we entered the cinema the queue is so crowded. fortunately we used the m-Tix so We lined up close enough to the ticket seller. The film is started at 03.30 p.m. we waited a little longer to watch the film, because we arrived at 3 p.m. When the door of the Studio is opened we immediately entered the studio.
When we arrived at the cinema, we immediately parking our motorcycle. When we entered the cinema the queue is so crowded. fortunately we used the m-Tix so We lined up close enough to the ticket seller. The film is started at 03.30 p.m. we waited a little longer to watch the film, because we arrived at 3 p.m. When the door of the Studio is opened we immediately entered the studio.
When the film is end, i am very pleased because the film is so good !!
by: Hernan Adhitiya R./15/8c
by: Hernan Adhitiya R./15/8c
you should write was not is at "because the film is so good !!"
BalasHapusGiordan 8c\14
"i and my brother is watching" revise to my brother and I watched".
BalasHapus"we immediately parking" revise to "we parked".
"The film is started" revise to "The film started".
"When the door of the Studio is opened" revise to "When the door of the studio opened".
use a capital letter in the beginning of the sentence. thanks.