Rabu, 10 Agustus 2011

Going to Ayah Beach

         In my holiday, I went to my grandmother in kebumen city. When I was there, I invited by my cousin. And then, I went to Ayah Beach with my big family. On the way, I was very happy because this is my first time in Ayah Beach. It is so fast whether it is so far. When I was there, I saw many scenery.
          Beautiful scenery, black sand, and no trash. I had not satisfied with the scenery, I invited to eat my big family. I ate fried shrimp, crab, coconut ice, so yummy. After I ate, I play water in sea. I am very very happy. If I not play water, not fantastic. So I play water carefully.
          After I tired, I go home. I so tired but so happy. I cant forget my this experience. I came back with a million happiness  

 BY : FARDIAZ MUHAMMAD 8C/13
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  1. esensi 8C/ 1211 Agustus 2011 pukul 04.43

    look at this sentence :
    I eat fried shrimp, crab, coconut ice, so yummy.

    change it becomes :
    I ate fried shrimp, crab, coconut ice, so yummy.

    Thanks :D

    BalasHapus
  2. Anonim11 Agustus 2011 pukul 10.49

    use a capital letter in "ayah beach". it should be "Ayah beach".

    revise your verb into the V2 such as eat to ate, play to played, etc.

    BalasHapus
  3. Fardiaz Muhammad 8C/1315 Agustus 2011 pukul 07.39

    Thank You for correcting.

    BalasHapus

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